Are You Killing the Tension? 3 Common Mistakes Writers Make With High-Stakes Scenes

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Youโ€™ve got car chases, ticking clocks, and maybe even a rooftop showdownโ€ฆ so why does your story still feel flat?

High-stakes storytelling isnโ€™t just about explosions or death-counts. Itโ€™s about emotional investment, clarity, and momentum. And if your scenes are falling short, chances are youโ€™re making one (or more) of these common mistakes.

The good news?

Theyโ€™re easy to fixโ€”and the results can be dramatic.

Letโ€™s crank up the tension.


Mistake #1: Passive Protagonists

If your hero is just a pinball bouncing from event to event, there are no stakesโ€”only randomness. We want characters who cause things to happen.

Imagine a detective who just stumbles onto clues instead of actively chasing down leads. The story starts to feel like a string of coincidences, which drains the tension right out of it.

In contrast, when your protagonist is driving the actionโ€”choosing which lead to pursue, pushing through obstacles, confronting antagonistsโ€”we feel their urgency. And with urgency comes stakes.

The more control your character thinks they have, the more we care when they risk losing it.


Mistake #2: Unclear Stakes

Itโ€™s not about how big the stakes are. Itโ€™s about whether theyโ€™re clearly communicated.

Even a small consequence can feel enormous if readers understand exactly whatโ€™s on the line.

Take a breakup scene: if the protagonist simply walks away from a relationship, it might seem minor. But if youโ€™ve shown us that this relationship is the characters last chance at healingโ€”or the key to their future happinessโ€”the same moment becomes emotionally explosive.

Clarity makes stakes hit harder. Make sure the reader knows what matters before itโ€™s in danger.


Mistake #3: Forgetting Scene-Level Stakes

Every scene needs stakes. Not just the climax. Not just the midpoint shift.

Every single scene.

Ask yourself: What does the character want right now? And what happens if they donโ€™t get it?

Say your protagonist is trying to convince their boss to keep them on a case. If they fail, they lose access to key evidence. Thatโ€™s a scene-level stake. Without it, the conversation is just filler. With it, it becomes a battlegroundโ€”with something to lose.

High-stakes stories arenโ€™t just made of big moments.

Theyโ€™re built from dozens of smaller scenes with clear goals and real consequences.


As a writing coach, Iโ€™ve seen writers unlock huge improvements just by clarifying a characterโ€™s motivation or tweaking a single line to reveal the cost of failure. You donโ€™t need to blow up a cityโ€”just make sure the reader knows what matters and why.

Avoid these mistakes, and your storyโ€™s tension will instantly feel more intentional, compelling, and high-stakesโ€ฆ without having to kill off half your cast.

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Kevin T. Johns is a Canadian writing coach who helps genre fiction authors craft clear, engaging, and emotionally resonant stakes that power their narratives forward. Get his checklist for turning ordinary scenes into literary gold:

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Kevin T. Johns is a writing coach, editor, and author who helps genre fiction writers plan, draft, and finish their novels. He has published 10 books, hosts The Writing Coach Podcast (230+ episodes), and teaches a nuts-and-bolts method for turning an idea into a finished book.

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